Come Together, Write Now
Before you begin – this is a very rough draft and the word count is shy. What I was having problems with were what other points to make. In particular I was having a hard time linking this process back to the readings we’ve done in this last unit. Please, Perr Reviewers, help me. Maybe it’s end of the semester craziness, but I had a really hard time with this essay. Thanks in advance and happy reading!!
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Group projects usually make people groan. Personally, I love group projects. Being the social creature that I am, I tend to thrive in a group environment. I like the push and pull of a group dynamic and I like collaboration. Even though there were going to be obvious challenges for an on-line class to do a group project, I looked forward to it. Fortunately, it was as awesome as I had hoped it would be.
We spend a lot of our writing submerged ourselves in our own writing and style. For me, I get quite tired of hearing (reading) my own stuff. I write within a certain box and I do not wander out of it often. Group projects, in general help with that. This project in particular, not only pushed me out of my comfortable writing nest, but took me into a medium that I am no longer at ease with.
When our group first started discussing the project, at first we weren’t sure what about writing we specifically wanted to address. There was a lot of material that had been covered in the 12 weeks prior; a lot of tips, rules, and theory on writing. Sussing it all out and picking something to make film about, was the most challenging in my opinion. I was stuck for ideas. Thankfully, this is where the group dynamic helped. The rest of the group was able to get it together and choose a basic subject – grammar – and a basic set up – a family that puts a lot of focus on the rules of grammar. The group collaborated on the script and then we got together and filmed.
I was not a part of the initial writing process. When I was able to make the second group meeting, the script was pretty firmly in place. There were some edits and additions that were made, but for the most part, there was not a lot of change from the first draft to the final version filmed. What I found interesting, though, was in my role as director, finding the ways to make the script come to life and make sure that the audience not only understood the premise of our film, but that the examples we were giving made sense and played okay.
Most comedians will tell you that writing a joke and telling a joke are vastly different. That what looks good and is funny on paper does not always come out to the audience as humorous. The same went for this process. In the second group meeting, we really wanted to include some examples that showed how word choice was important to make sure that the speaker’s message is getting across. We had the daughter in our show use the word “affect” when she actually meant “effect”. On paper, it made sense and was funny. But when we did the read through of the new lines, we realized that it would not work on film. It is almost impossible to ascertain which one – affect or effect – a person is saying unless they really push the pronunciation. We tried it, but it really did not play right. So, we revised and we dropped it from the script. If the point we were trying to make was not going to be picked up, then there was no point in keeping it.
Conversely, we also had to add other examples that were going to play on screen – such as the last scene between mom and daughter. The read through was running a bit short and so we wanted to add time, but we also wanted to make sure that the content we added was not just padding, like words in a paper, but good content that added to the film and also helped to illustrate the grammar rules we were showing.
What I found interesting was that despite my love for writing, I really enjoyed the director’s role. I liked looking at the script and envisioning how it was going to look. My husband, who is a film maker and who helped our group with the editing process, suggested that I use storyboarding as a way to make sure that we got all of the shots that I wanted to get. I did not story board the entire script, but I did use this process as an outline for myself for when we got to filming. It was this process that I found very similar to when I outline my papers before I start writing. It helped to make sure that I covered all that we wanted to cover and did so clearly. We ended up doing about six takes – or drafts, if you will – so that we would have enough shots to be able to cut the film together.
It was also interesting to watch the actors edit and revise themselves not only in words, but in tone and pitch of the voice. It is something that we do in writing when we choose words or add punctuation. The actors in our group would change their pitch, tone, and body language as they got more comfortable with the lines and with being on camera. The first few takes you could see the self-consciousness that was not completely related to still reading the script, but in the last few takes, this fades and the lines become tighter and clearer – much like the revision process in writing. As you become more confident in your work, you begin to see where the weak spots are and you work on fixing them. It stops being a conscious effort and begins to be automatic. As the actors became more confident, they started picking up on the vocal cues and nonverbal elements of the people they were working with. It made the film flow a lot better and made the transitions better.
I really liked this process. I enjoyed the collaboration and really feel like every single one of us contributed so much. We really fit and we found that we had a lot to talk about in our meetings, and not just about the project. We talked a lot about our writing experiences and what we have learned in this class and how that was going to translate into our “real” lives.
Well well well. So this is what it’s come to, eh – the writer critiquing the director. Muah hahaha, vengeance is mine!
Why, then, couldn’t your writing have been of a lesser quality. Why does your descriptive prose, your pleasant use of punctuation, and concise description have to be the ruin of an otherwise pleasant reckoning? Sigh. Alright. Might as well get on with it …
To start with the negative, to get the cut out of the way, I would like to see some elaboration on the process and how it relates back to the readings. How did it tie in to Strunk and White, Williams, et al? I expect that’s something that already crossed your mind, and you did say this is just a draft. Your descriptions of the process of writing versus filming is quite good – here I mean especially how you related what worked and what didn’t, and how it came out in the read-through. It’s a window into what happened, and that you related it to a comedian’s ethic is gold. The finish is strong, too, like Duran Duran hitting the high notes of “House of the Rising Sun.” The sentence or two you devoted to confidence, and how it helps the process along, is good and could be elaborated on more without hurting your basic premise. The more I think about it, between getting up to get another cup of coffee, the more it occurs to me that such elaboration actually enhances your premise, and brings it all home. Boost up the word count with a paragraph or two that relate back to the reading, and I think you’re good.
first paragraph, i dont think online is on-line anymore.
fourth paragraph, The last sentence beginning with “what I found interesting…” needs to be broken up a bit.
I really enjoyed this! I love how you discussed the changes the group went through with deiciding to drop a scene.
I’m having trouble adding parts from the reading into my paper as well- but I think thats the only area for improvement here!
I think it is great so far! I would add some examples of how this process is similar or different than the writing process, and then like previously suggested maybe a few suggestions from earlier readings. Its so funny because I can actually hear your voice when I am reading this! Lovely!